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this is the out line


I. intro to general problem


II.summaries of two articles


III. and what I recommend for people to read.........





MY ESSAY...








Have you ever heard the saying “Women are from Venus and Men are from Mars?” well much has been said about both being from different planets and having different cultures, the reality is that we are all from the same planet, but the saying seems to fit because men and women communicate with each other on a daily basis and don’t always understand what the other is saying which becomes the problem. If we take a close look at the ways we communicate you can see the differences in the talking styles, the different ways of thinking,and the different point of views. I believe the main problem between male and female communication is that men are more direct and to the point, while women like to take their time and tell a story which will be typically more illustrative and emotional than the men would like to hear. Therefore, my opinion is men will give women a deaf ear to what they say because they will most likely lose interest in there long explanative story.





In “His Talk, Her Talk,'; by Joyce Maynard, The problems of male and female communication are discussed by stating some of the authors own personal experiences in her life. She also discusses how men and women like to talk about different topics and the reasons why they are drawn into same sex conversations, Quite early she gives the example of her son, who plays blocks and a toy car and even makes car noises to go with it all while also playing with a doll which she terms environmental contamination. She believes that there are no innate differences between men and women, but that it is the environment who has taught the child about the differences. She also drew upon occasions when her husband would come home after having met pals at a club. She was interested to hear in full details of what happened but it was not his nature to give as many details as she would and her understanding was just that all genders are different. Whereas in the second essay “Man to Man, Women to Women” by Mark A. Sherman and Adelaide Haas also discusses the problems of male and female communication but from a more clinical perspective, the authors send out questioners to get there answers and they discussed how the topics of the conversations showed to be a very important key in a conversation and how different they were, such as how women’s topics tended to be more to the self and emotional and they sought support while having a conversation while men’s topics had shown to be more simple in comparison and they sought to just be comfortable, the authors showed how men and women just feel more comfortable communicating with the same sex because they felt more understood and they authors found that there are solutions to problems of male and females communications.





While both articles regarding male-female communication were great, they took on two different viewpoints. ';His Talk Her Talk'; displayed a positive, almost playful, manner in which the communication problem was discussed. ';Man to Man, Woman to Woman'; had a more clinical perspective I would recommend the latter, ';Man to Man, Woman to Woman';, simply because I feel that this article represented a problem on a more serious note, yet it did not have an underlying depressing quality to it. The authors put careful thought and consideration into this article and it is apparent that couples can learn much more from a clinical perspective than a comical.I need Help!! can you proofread my essay??!!! PLEASEEE?
Have you ever heard the saying “Women are from Venus and Men are from Mars”? While the saying may be funny, the reality is that we are all from the same planet. The saying is a great way of describing the differences in communication between men and women. Men and women communicate in different ways, and dont always understand each other clearly. If we take a closer look at the ways we communicate, you can see the differences in the talking styles, the ways of thinking, and the points of view. However, I believe the main problem between male and female communication is that men are more direct and to the point, while women are more illustrative and emotional than men. For instance, a man may communicate a story in one sentence, while a woman may tell a very long and detailed story that is full of side-notes and emotion. This in turn may cause men to give women a deaf ear during communication due to them losing interest in the woman's long and expansive nature.





In “His Talk, Her Talk,'; by Joyce Maynard, the problems of male and female communication are discussed by stating some of the authors own personal experiences in her life. She also discusses how men and women like to talk about different topics and the reasons why they are drawn into same sex conversations. Quite early she gives the example of her son, who plays with blocks and a toy car. He even makes car noises to go with the toys. While her son is playing with these stereotypical ';boy toys';, he is also playing with a doll, which is a stereotypical ';girl toy. The author calls this environmental contamination. She believes that there are no innate differences between men and women, but that it is the environment that has taught the child about the differences. She also drew upon occasions when her husband would come home after having met pals at a club. She was interested to hear in full details of what happened but it was not his nature to give as many details about his night out.


In the second essay, “Man to Man, Women to Women”, by Mark A. Sherman and Adelaide Haas also discusses the problems of male and female communication but from a more clinical perspective. The authors send out questionaires to gather information about communication topics. The topic of the conversation was the key in the success of communication between men and women. Women were comfortable talking about themselves and sought emotional support from the other communicator. Men, however, talked about more simple and superficial topics. The authors showed how men and women feel more comfortable communicating with the same sex because they felt more understood.





While both articles regarding male-female communication were great, they took on two different viewpoints. ';His Talk Her Talk'; displayed a positive, almost playful, manner in which the communication problem was discussed. ';Man to Man, Woman to Woman'; had a more clinical perspective I would recommend the latter, ';Man to Man, Woman to Woman';, simply because I feel that this article represented a problem on a more serious note, without being at all depressing or boring. The authors put careful thought and consideration into this article and it is apparent that couples can learn much more from a clinical perspective than a comical.